I see someone's already on typo patrol, so I'm just gonna say this:
This story is GREAT so far! Loving the hunks, tho of course I'm wishing for at least one reptile, heh X3 ...But please, stop mixing tense the way you have been in narration. (Folks misuse tense all the time in conversation, so no worries there.)
I'm not trying to shit on you, I promise—tense can be tricky! But you've sometimes got one sentence in past tense but then another in present in the same text box. If you're mixing tense, you should do so sparingly, and for only where it makes sense. Here's an example:
*: We get in the car.
*transition*
*: We drove for a few minutes, chatting here and there. It wasn't very eventful, otherwise. Now, we're here, back at the store.
Use it to refer to things that definitively happened in the past that we didn't see clearly, like after time skips or talking about something a character did in the past, if you use it at all. The place I most recently found issue with was during the Pollos scene with Trent:
*: . . .I take a chip and dip it into the bowl and shoveled the ensemble into my mouth."
You mixed tense in the same sentence ^^; Common mistake, don't worry, I do it too. That said, earlier, you did do it more understandably:
*: We paid. . .retrieved. . .and returned. . .
*: He pokes around his bowl with a fork.
This works here because it's summarizing a bunch of boring actions in succession before getting back to the present. I would have done it present the whole way because it's all in the same scene, no transition or time skip, but this is perfectly valid, too!
Technically speaking, it's unusual to mix tense in a narrative, mostly outside of stuff like, "Jack seems confident—he did this same thing as a kid tons of times—and winds up like a baseball pitcher to throw the rubber chicken." But I mix tense myself, so I would be a hypocrite to take the easy route and say don't do it at all ^^; Just be aware of why you decide to change tense and when/where.
Other than that, I'm quite enjoying this story! I have a BA in Music, so I'm looking forward to seeing Eddy learn more about the wonderful world of it. The voice acting is also really great—and it's not too much. Loads of VNs try to have a LOT of voice acting, some are fully voiced, but I find that can get a little annoying at times.
Finally, I stopped to write this to ask something, mainly: when the hell did you get into my mind to write Trent's big voiced line during lunch? Because holy crap was I hearing an echo! Very good work there, makes him relatable! (I also related to Eddy at that time, heh.)
Terribly sorry if this was rude at all >_<; Just wanted to give some advice.
As for more feedback, AAAAAA WHAT A CLIFFHANGERRRRR YOU MEANIEEEE! Just got to the current end of Darrell's route, really loving it. Apart from the tense thing, you're doing pretty well! Dunno if I wanna go down Chester's route, but I do wanna know more about that subplot. Looking forward to more soon! ^^
Also, an idea I've had for ages that I think would work great for Trent: having him utter, "Parallel fifths and octaves!" as an oath. (Don't get it? Ask your Music Theory friends ;) )
Need some help for Android version. Every time i try to load a save it crashes. Its never loaded properly, but I was able to deal with it for a while and just skip to where I was at. now I'm further in and i have trouble remembering previous choices I made and it takes a while. Any solutions or ideas?
Hiya! Unfortunately with Android issues, the problem is almost always is the device and not the game. If a save file is corrupted, it's not possible to recover it.
To save time, you can go to Options -> Skip Unseen Text to quickly get back to where you were in the story. Should take a few minutes.
Don't worry too much about the choices. All choice combinations lead to Chester's route. If you want Darrell's route, you just either have to pick the edgy outfit, pre game with Cliff, or get wings with Darrell. Just one of those 3.
I'm relatively new to playing Visual Novels, and I have only played through the current cut-off of Darrell's Route so far, but I think this already has the potential to be my forever favorite one.
Eddy is a great protagonist, and I'm sure most people who play this can relate to some of his struggles, it makes you really want to root for him. Every character is likeable in their own ways, but Darrell became my favorite character the moment we met him in the story, and I can say his route is already more than I could have hoped for so far. (If only I waited for the next update to play, this cliff hanger is painful LOL)
To everyone involved in this VN's creation: I know it doesn't mean much from a stranger on the internet, but please, keep up the amazing work! I'll definitely be keeping an eye on your projects.
Not sure what you mean by "corny text". But I've gone through and made heavy edits to the story. I made a lot of adjustments that either condense information or just get rid of stuff that I personally don't find tasteful anymore.
Omg please tell me there is gonna be an album for this songs, i just hit show night and this is some of the BEST music i have heard along with all the jam sessions!
I appreciate that the writer(s) is/are adding so much diversity to the routes. I really do. It just left me feeling a little... uncomfortable? But that's fine, because it just means that that one isn't for me. And it's not to take away from the fact that they (along with the artists) made having an anxiety attack next to real. Legitimately got me panicking a little, heh!
Keep it up, though, guys. Can't wait for more shenanigans with Darrell and all the other options!
I completed it today! Ill say, I'm absolutely in love with all these characters. Moriah so far being my absolute favorite.
Although I'm not a huge fan of poly stuff personally the characters are just so enjoyable I can easily look past that, really looking forward to seeing how this pans out!
I just updated to the Win PC build 6 (0.6.4) and I had chosen a name when I started but everyone keeps referring to me as Eddy? They used to use the name I chose, so think it might be a coding error in the update.
I just caught up with my first run of the game, which I played on-and-off over the course of about 15-18 months. I landed on Chester's route before I even knew routes existed (& just found out lol). This game over all was such a cathartic and introspective read, as so many of the difficulties I face in my own professional life felt reflected in Eddy's journey (minus the hot boss thing lol), and it was extremely satisfying to follow through & look at my own journey compared to his. I really loved this journey <3
I can not explain how much I love this game! I finished Chester’s route and tbh I’m really sad it ended with info being revealed and not being continued after. I then did Darrel’s and I can’t wait for more of his route! Best game.
I am kinda afraid of where Chester's route could go, specifically about Eddy's romantics feelings not being reciprocated by Chester.
Because its not something Chester wants people to know about (could change maybe) and maybe their open relationship is only sex-opened but not love-opened since he didnt say anything about love.
I would expect (as a player of a VN) for them to end romantically together, but in this route it not something easy to do in a logic and satisfactory way. We'll have to see, absolutely amazing update, it made me take a lot of breaks between scenes because they were so good.
Done playing new build. It was so cool and unexpected. I just hope that Eddy will have something not only with Chester, but with Dave too. And Randy is kinda nice, interesting will there be something NSFW with him.
Now I wait for the build with my precious Darrel, really wish to see kissing scene.
Stars above, that confirmation was wonderful, I could feel the relief wash over my face. Kinda was unfazed by the albeit more bombastic revelation that did came right after, but none of that is actually of concern to me, I'm fact I'm really OK with that.
I'm dancing around to not spoil anything, but damn that hot tub scene... With all those hot men... Really made my horny demons create fanfics worth of material...
Last scene was a little disappointing, I will indulge in those greedy feeling of Eddy just a bit 😉
Thanks for the update, can't wait to read the next one
0.6 spoiler
Idk why but i was relieved when i learned that Chester's "secret" was him being a sex worker and a money launderer and not him cheating on Dave lmao
Hey guys! Just FYI, I'm not planning on a "midnight" release or anything. Episode 6 will be dropping during the afternoon/evening (EST) of Dec 28. Hope you're excited!!
this is going to be a weird question to ask but at what point do the routes diverge? I was not aware that there are multiple LI routes until theres a notif on Chester's day 6 content not available yet
why did you guys leave darrell's route like that in the end 😭 that's just plain pure evil, but regardless i loved this one, will be waiting for new updates.
Do we get some more NSFW action with other character on the latest update or solo stuff again? I mean I love the MC doing some solo stuff but I think it's time to hook up with other character. Sorry no pressure btw it's just my suggestion
I really love this game sm as soon as found it, just one thing id really like to know if you do add a route for Dave would it be the player being in poly relationship with him and Chester because that would be pretty sweet also I LOVE DAVE SM IM SORRY BUT FIRST TIME PLAYING I LOVE HIMMM HES SO CUTE FOR WHAT I INSTANTLY STARTED FANGIRLING EVERYTIME HE SHOWS APPEARANCE IN THE GAME 🥹😭
I like that both routes have content that shows certain things Protag went through, though I feel bad doing Chester's route. because he's cheating (unless their relationship allows polygamy) on his husband with you!
would be funny if you make references for naming yourself names of characters too, but still. you do you. still a great fuckin' game!
i think i like Pat more not because of his Red flags... i mean he maybe sometimes breaking the rules of his workplace but he is still an adorable dog, hope no one hates him for that
Personally, I find it kinda hypocritical of Chester to call Pat out on that given he's married to Dave. Pat's my favorite character personally and easily the route I most wanna play. He seems like he's got some hidden depth to him that he hides behind that cheerful, sarcastic personality of his.
oh well, yeah Chester is too harsh on his Workers love life but i wonder if their previous workers did cause both Dave and Chester troubles before... but still i still think it's unfair now and i still love Pat despite him being like that and have his secret hobby which is his Drag persona.
Hmmm. I think I'll wait until Pat's route is available before I start things up. Trent and Cliff would be my second and third choices, respectively. I'm not really interested in Darrell as for Chester and Dave's routes, I'd honestly feel like a homewrecker since the two are married.
I noticed on the wiki most characters are gay. Will we be seeing any asexual or nonbinary representation among side characters who haven't appeared yet?
Hey, I just started playing this game and as an avid metal listener, are Darrell and Cliff tributes or reference to who I think they are? Either that or it's me overthinking thing cause like Darrell plays Lead Guitar and Cliff play Bass lol
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Chester's route feels weird, it leggit feels like mc is starting to get groomed :S
I see someone's already on typo patrol, so I'm just gonna say this:
This story is GREAT so far! Loving the hunks, tho of course I'm wishing for at least one reptile, heh X3 ...But please, stop mixing tense the way you have been in narration. (Folks misuse tense all the time in conversation, so no worries there.)
I'm not trying to shit on you, I promise—tense can be tricky! But you've sometimes got one sentence in past tense but then another in present in the same text box. If you're mixing tense, you should do so sparingly, and for only where it makes sense. Here's an example:
*: We get in the car.
*transition*
*: We drove for a few minutes, chatting here and there. It wasn't very eventful, otherwise. Now, we're here, back at the store.
Use it to refer to things that definitively happened in the past that we didn't see clearly, like after time skips or talking about something a character did in the past, if you use it at all. The place I most recently found issue with was during the Pollos scene with Trent:
*: . . .I take a chip and dip it into the bowl and shoveled the ensemble into my mouth."
You mixed tense in the same sentence ^^; Common mistake, don't worry, I do it too. That said, earlier, you did do it more understandably:
*: We paid. . .retrieved. . .and returned. . .
*: He pokes around his bowl with a fork.
This works here because it's summarizing a bunch of boring actions in succession before getting back to the present. I would have done it present the whole way because it's all in the same scene, no transition or time skip, but this is perfectly valid, too!
Technically speaking, it's unusual to mix tense in a narrative, mostly outside of stuff like, "Jack seems confident—he did this same thing as a kid tons of times—and winds up like a baseball pitcher to throw the rubber chicken." But I mix tense myself, so I would be a hypocrite to take the easy route and say don't do it at all ^^; Just be aware of why you decide to change tense and when/where.
Other than that, I'm quite enjoying this story! I have a BA in Music, so I'm looking forward to seeing Eddy learn more about the wonderful world of it. The voice acting is also really great—and it's not too much. Loads of VNs try to have a LOT of voice acting, some are fully voiced, but I find that can get a little annoying at times.
Finally, I stopped to write this to ask something, mainly: when the hell did you get into my mind to write Trent's big voiced line during lunch? Because holy crap was I hearing an echo! Very good work there, makes him relatable! (I also related to Eddy at that time, heh.)
Terribly sorry if this was rude at all >_<; Just wanted to give some advice.
Thanks for the feedback :>
You're welcome! Just glad I wasn't too harsh qwq;
As for more feedback, AAAAAA WHAT A CLIFFHANGERRRRR YOU MEANIEEEE! Just got to the current end of Darrell's route, really loving it. Apart from the tense thing, you're doing pretty well! Dunno if I wanna go down Chester's route, but I do wanna know more about that subplot. Looking forward to more soon! ^^
Also, an idea I've had for ages that I think would work great for Trent: having him utter, "Parallel fifths and octaves!" as an oath. (Don't get it? Ask your Music Theory friends ;) )
Typo report: "The more expensive ones that have a tag that
saysays, 'Please ask for assistance.'"Thanks for the feedback! I'll fix these issues in the next build.
Please keep the typos coming if you find more! But please redirect the feedback to the Bugs & Feedback dev log.
Typo report: "I look back to the front-of-house and see the empire these
have twotwo have built."Thanks!
Need some help for Android version. Every time i try to load a save it crashes. Its never loaded properly, but I was able to deal with it for a while and just skip to where I was at. now I'm further in and i have trouble remembering previous choices I made and it takes a while. Any solutions or ideas?
Hiya! Unfortunately with Android issues, the problem is almost always is the device and not the game. If a save file is corrupted, it's not possible to recover it.
To save time, you can go to Options -> Skip Unseen Text to quickly get back to where you were in the story. Should take a few minutes.
Don't worry too much about the choices. All choice combinations lead to Chester's route. If you want Darrell's route, you just either have to pick the edgy outfit, pre game with Cliff, or get wings with Darrell. Just one of those 3.
As a BA in Music and a furry, I am legally obligated to check this one out.
I'm relatively new to playing Visual Novels, and I have only played through the current cut-off of Darrell's Route so far, but I think this already has the potential to be my forever favorite one.
Eddy is a great protagonist, and I'm sure most people who play this can relate to some of his struggles, it makes you really want to root for him. Every character is likeable in their own ways, but Darrell became my favorite character the moment we met him in the story, and I can say his route is already more than I could have hoped for so far. (If only I waited for the next update to play, this cliff hanger is painful LOL)
To everyone involved in this VN's creation: I know it doesn't mean much from a stranger on the internet, but please, keep up the amazing work! I'll definitely be keeping an eye on your projects.
I really hope to see more of Moriah, she’s definitely my favorite character lol. She’s so wholesome I love her
What is the difference between the two versions
The "content creator edition" censors porn scenes. If you want to see the regular porn scenes, download the standard version.
Oh ok ths
Will there ever be a gallery for scenes and character sprites?
It's on the to-do list.
Oh, okay. I didn't know sorry.
on some real shit Pat can have my babies
I love this game so much this vn gonna be one of fav and I really want to know Chester route is really end?or continue?
Chester's route will continue on Episode 8. We're currently working on Episode 7 right now.
I was rereading the vn again and i foud something wrong changed
Why did the corny text got removed? I Really found it nice and entertaining
It doesn't change my opinion of the vn it's still one of my favorites it just makes he think that the vn holds itself back a little
Not sure what you mean by "corny text". But I've gone through and made heavy edits to the story. I made a lot of adjustments that either condense information or just get rid of stuff that I personally don't find tasteful anymore.
You lot have created the perfect dream job for me. Awesome music and awesome characters. This is really amazing even if I'm very early in it
Omg please tell me there is gonna be an album for this songs, i just hit show night and this is some of the BEST music i have heard along with all the jam sessions!
Martini's songs: https://martinidog.bandcamp.com/album/chord-progressions
FAFO: https://rhythmbastard.bandcamp.com/track/f-a-f-o-w-bowserpuma
I appreciate that the writer(s) is/are adding so much diversity to the routes. I really do. It just left me feeling a little... uncomfortable? But that's fine, because it just means that that one isn't for me. And it's not to take away from the fact that they (along with the artists) made having an anxiety attack next to real. Legitimately got me panicking a little, heh!
Keep it up, though, guys. Can't wait for more shenanigans with Darrell and all the other options!
I completed it today! Ill say, I'm absolutely in love with all these characters. Moriah so far being my absolute favorite.
Although I'm not a huge fan of poly stuff personally the characters are just so enjoyable I can easily look past that, really looking forward to seeing how this pans out!
I just updated to the Win PC build 6 (0.6.4) and I had chosen a name when I started but everyone keeps referring to me as Eddy? They used to use the name I chose, so think it might be a coding error in the update.
That's intentional it says it in dev log "build 6 errata"
I just caught up with my first run of the game, which I played on-and-off over the course of about 15-18 months. I landed on Chester's route before I even knew routes existed (& just found out lol). This game over all was such a cathartic and introspective read, as so many of the difficulties I face in my own professional life felt reflected in Eddy's journey (minus the hot boss thing lol), and it was extremely satisfying to follow through & look at my own journey compared to his. I really loved this journey <3
I can not explain how much I love this game! I finished Chester’s route and tbh I’m really sad it ended with info being revealed and not being continued after. I then did Darrel’s and I can’t wait for more of his route! Best game.
one of the best Vn i have played love it and the visuals 10
only thing i hope is that there will be a corey route (pls pls pls god)
One question
is there going to be a dave route?
Yes, there are also going to be routes for Dave, Trent, Pat and Cliff.
Spoilers!
I am kinda afraid of where Chester's route could go, specifically about Eddy's romantics feelings not being reciprocated by Chester.
Because its not something Chester wants people to know about (could change maybe) and maybe their open relationship is only sex-opened but not love-opened since he didnt say anything about love.
I would expect (as a player of a VN) for them to end romantically together, but in this route it not something easy to do in a logic and satisfactory way. We'll have to see, absolutely amazing update, it made me take a lot of breaks between scenes because they were so good.
Keep at it!
Done playing new build. It was so cool and unexpected. I just hope that Eddy will have something not only with Chester, but with Dave too. And Randy is kinda nice, interesting will there be something NSFW with him.
Now I wait for the build with my precious Darrel, really wish to see kissing scene.
Good luck and Happy New Year soon!
Stars above, that confirmation was wonderful, I could feel the relief wash over my face. Kinda was unfazed by the albeit more bombastic revelation that did came right after, but none of that is actually of concern to me, I'm fact I'm really OK with that.
I'm dancing around to not spoil anything, but damn that hot tub scene... With all those hot men... Really made my horny demons create fanfics worth of material...
Last scene was a little disappointing, I will indulge in those greedy feeling of Eddy just a bit 😉
Thanks for the update, can't wait to read the next one
0.6 spoiler
Idk why but i was relieved when i learned that Chester's "secret" was him being a sex worker and a money launderer and not him cheating on Dave lmaoSo true. They really are living the LGBTQ+ Mantra, Be gay, do crime.
Hey guys! Just FYI, I'm not planning on a "midnight" release or anything. Episode 6 will be dropping during the afternoon/evening (EST) of Dec 28. Hope you're excited!!
Just need another hour or two... hang tight!
this is going to be a weird question to ask but at what point do the routes diverge? I was not aware that there are multiple LI routes until theres a notif on Chester's day 6 content not available yet
The only route split available right now is during day 5 at the Velour Lounge. You have to unlock Darrell's route by following the instructions here: https://chordprogressions.itch.io/chord-progressions/devlog/611150/spoilers-how-...
Future route splits may occur at different moments in the story.
Noted, thanks for the explanation!
plz put fafo on spotify i beg
why did you guys leave darrell's route like that in the end 😭 that's just plain pure evil, but regardless i loved this one, will be waiting for new updates.
Do we get some more NSFW action with other character on the latest update or solo stuff again? I mean I love the MC doing some solo stuff but I think it's time to hook up with other character. Sorry no pressure btw it's just my suggestion
Sex scenes with other characters are planned for future builds
I really love this game sm as soon as found it, just one thing id really like to know if you do add a route for Dave would it be the player being in poly relationship with him and Chester because that would be pretty sweet also I LOVE DAVE SM IM SORRY BUT FIRST TIME PLAYING I LOVE HIMMM HES SO CUTE FOR WHAT I INSTANTLY STARTED FANGIRLING EVERYTIME HE SHOWS APPEARANCE IN THE GAME 🥹😭
Love the game! Downloaded immediately after reading Before You Depart. Are the more routes planned? Specifically Corey's?
Routes are planned for Chester, Darrell, Trent, Pat, Cliff, and Dave. Corey may have a "victory lap" route after all those are done.
Thanks for responding and that's awesome! 🤘🏾 I'm looking forward to future builds!
what day will the 6th build be released? IM SO EXCITED!!
I like that both routes have content that shows certain things Protag went through, though I feel bad doing Chester's route. because he's cheating (unless their relationship allows polygamy) on his husband with you!
would be funny if you make references for naming yourself names of characters too, but still. you do you. still a great fuckin' game!
Is there anywhere as a non-patreon user that I can get/download some of the music from this game? I really like the score.
You can find some (but not all) the tracks here! https://martinidog.bandcamp.com/album/chord-progressions
Ooooh, thank you!
🐶
i think i like Pat more not because of his Red flags... i mean he maybe sometimes breaking the rules of his workplace but he is still an adorable dog, hope no one hates him for that
Personally, I find it kinda hypocritical of Chester to call Pat out on that given he's married to Dave. Pat's my favorite character personally and easily the route I most wanna play. He seems like he's got some hidden depth to him that he hides behind that cheerful, sarcastic personality of his.
oh well, yeah Chester is too harsh on his Workers love life but i wonder if their previous workers did cause both Dave and Chester troubles before... but still i still think it's unfair now and i still love Pat despite him being like that and have his secret hobby which is his Drag persona.
Still waiting here,take as much time you need don't rush it, totally understand everything so keep going!
Hmmm. I think I'll wait until Pat's route is available before I start things up. Trent and Cliff would be my second and third choices, respectively. I'm not really interested in Darrell as for Chester and Dave's routes, I'd honestly feel like a homewrecker since the two are married.
I noticed on the wiki most characters are gay. Will we be seeing any asexual or nonbinary representation among side characters who haven't appeared yet?
There'll be some nonbinary and asexual representation :3. I don't want to spoil anything by announcing who it will be and when.
Does anyone know how to subscribe to tags
Hey, I just started playing this game and as an avid metal listener, are Darrell and Cliff tributes or reference to who I think they are? Either that or it's me overthinking thing cause like Darrell plays Lead Guitar and Cliff play Bass lol
You know exactly who they're named after hehehe u.u